|Photo courtesy of Tess Kincaid for Magpie Tales|
With eyes downcast, unshed, behind a mask I hide
and try to overcome my desperate loneliness.
How do I move forward without you by my side?
The thought so painful and foreign, so odious;
my emotions oscillate between vulnerability
and vindictiveness. A deep breath, I take. My copious
thoughts filled with stifling revenge, not humility.
Dear God! I beg of you to save me from such a vice!
With every broken heart beat my body quivers.
Alive I am, but for what purpose? What price
if I give in to malicious temptation? I pray my heart withers,
and shrinks. For loving you, caring for you, is destroying me.
By Margaret Bednar, Art Happens 365, July 21, 2011
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This is for Magpie Tales & Poetry Jam. Magpies photo prompt is the awesome African mask and Poetry Jam's theme for the week is temptation. Just so nobody worries about me, this poem is completely fabricated and does not reflect me current state of heart and mind. But, do beware of a woman scorned! :)
Now, this is also for dVerse - Poets Pub: Crit Friday - a means in which a poem is to be approached with a bit of scrutiny and critiqued in order to help make it better. There are some ground rules explained in this week's post over at dVerse. But I am really happy to present my poem above.
Temptation's Mask was written in roughly 30 minutes. I rarely try to rhyme - so that was my challenge. But I didn't stick with a syllabic rhythm... I often get to this point and then wound what to do. I 'm all ears!
Critique away! :)
I am on a bit of a blog break 'till the end of the month - July 31st. However, I will have my I-Pad handy and will methodically go through whoever links up to this challenge.